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You have seen a job advertisement in some newspaper. Write a letter to your friend asking him to consider this job. Please say: - Where have you seen the ad? - What is the job description? - Why do you think, he is a suitable candidate for it?

Dear Roy, I am writing
this
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 letter with
a
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the
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 hope that you are well. As, I have very exciting
news
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 for you, once you will know about
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 you will be thrilled.
Firstly
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, as you know I am keen to read
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 every morning, so did I read it today morning as well,
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however
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however,
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 the advertisement I saw
this
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 morning made me write you
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 letter, as it was about
Toronto
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the Toronto
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times
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 and they are looking for
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news
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a news
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 reporter. And you are the first person who came across my mind. On top of that, I read a job description, and it seems like your
porfolio
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portfolio
 will
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 all the requirements they are looking for. As
this
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 position
required
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requires
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minimum
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a minimum
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five
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of five
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 years of experience in any
news
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 media, print media
also
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 works.
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, you have more than that with your current job as an article writer at
triumph
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 magazine.
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, it is your dream
of
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to
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 become a
news
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 reporter in a big city. In my point of
view
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view,
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 you are
most
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the most
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 suited candidate for
this
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 title. I am asking you to send your latest resume to their
Email id
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email ID
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 at your earliest convenience. Best regards,

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the introduction is a bit more formal and flows better into the main body of the letter.
task achievement
Try to avoid unnecessary repetition in phrases like 'very exciting news'. It can be more concise.
coherence and cohesion
Rephrase to enhance clarity, for example, 'I read it today morning as well' could be 'I also read it this morning'.
task achievement
You effectively communicated your excitement about the job opportunity.
task achievement
The job requirements you mentioned are relevant and show you know the candidate's qualifications well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • came across
  • widely-read
  • credibility
  • passionate about
  • considerable experience
  • qualifications
  • professional skills
  • personal attributes
  • ideal candidate
  • achievements
  • career growth
  • long-term career goals
  • meaningfully contribute
  • industry
  • rarity
  • capability
  • excel
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