The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009
The pie charts provide key evidence about the electricity generated in Germany and France from all
sources
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and sustainable
sources
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in the year 2009. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that the generation of electricity in Germany
leads
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has
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a significant proportion from Conventional Thermal,
whereas
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Nuclear was a substantial one in France.
According to
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what is shown,
Germany
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Germany's
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power output had a nearly quarter per cent from Nuclear.
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, sustainable
sources
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had the least amount, 17.4
percent
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. It can be seen that sustainable
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projected four categories: Biomass and Wind were two-thirds in total (39.3 and 36.9%).
While
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the creation of Hydroelectric and Solar
were
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was
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approximately 23% altogether in 2009. In terms of
France
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France's
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power production, Conventional Thermal and green energy
sources
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represented one-third in total, 24%.
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, the green energy
sources
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predicted around a majority of creation with Hydroelectric, Wind and Biomass leading to 18.5% production collectively.
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,
the
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Solar and Geothermal were the least of production, it shows 0.9%.

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