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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates
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the manufacture
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manufacture
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manufacturing
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level
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 of significant fuel which is used in
UK
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the UK
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 market between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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, The highest
production
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 is Petroleum, which
as
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has
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 fluctuation in
there
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their
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treads
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trend
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. The least
manufacture
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manufactured
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 fuel was natural gas but
at the
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end
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end,
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 it rose
steadly
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steadily
 and
the
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apply
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Coal
has
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had
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moderate
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a moderate
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 number of
user
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users
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 at the beginning and
the
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in the
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 following years it
got
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apply
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decline
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declined
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. In 1981,
the
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apply
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Petroleum
production
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begins
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began
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with
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at
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 below 100, and it was stable after
few
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a few
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 years
with
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at
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 140.
However
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, in 1991,
it
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they
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 faced a decline to 100 stage and
then
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 they increased sharply to above 140 until 2000.
The
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apply
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Coal started
they
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its
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production
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level
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with
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at
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 80 in 1981, and it
has
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apply
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decreased
rapaidly
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rapidly
 from 1981 to 1986.
Conversely
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,
the
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apply
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natural gas
has
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had
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 a
level
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40
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of 40
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 in 1981, but
this
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 number increased considerably between 1991 and 2000 with above 40 to 100 respectively.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, coal has
decline
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declined
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 throughout the following years until 2000 with
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production
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a production
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level
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 below 40.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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