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In today's competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

In the modern workplace, employees need to adopt a variety of
skills
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 to reach their
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 potential. From my perspective, both soft
skills
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 and academic qualifications are required to develop in your work field;
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, social and in-person
skills
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 are more essential in the work environment.
Since people
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 with high
level
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 of social
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 tend to have a wider circle of relationships,
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 to their ability to solve work-related problems more easily and effectively. First of all, individuals who have the ability to communicate with others and understand their needs and concerns are more likely to be more productive and useful in the workplace. The reasoning behind
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 is the fact that every commercial organization or company must deal with different types of people on
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 basis, and every person
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 to have a special personality which requires a specific kind of treatment.
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, having people with a high sense of emotional intelligence will help to serve clients' needs more smoothly and sufficiently.
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, in many companies ,HR usually
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 new employees based on their characters and their personal traits
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 of their academic pursuits.
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, it has become a crucial requirement in every kind of work to be able to overcome a diversity of obstacles with the minimum amount of harm. Every occupation has many issues that face workers in everyday life, and the way of solving these problems may affect the quality of the service if it
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 done badly.
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 why the vast majority of employers look for workers who can think logically to find the roots of any problem and solve it efficiently.
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, in hospitals, nurses face a lot of challenging situations that require them to think very fast and come
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 solutions in a very short period of time.
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, both social
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 and good qualifications are important.
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, I think having a flexible personality to handle difficult situations and deal with clients is more important than the academic aspect.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay presents a clear argument, but ensure that each point is directly linked to your main thesis. Make connections between your supporting arguments and your central claim more explicit to strengthen your overall argument.
Task Achievement
While you provide examples to support your points, consider elaborating on these examples a bit more to enhance their relevance and detail. This will help to demonstrate your points more effectively.
Task Achievement
Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and presents your viewpoint clearly, which is a strong aspect of your essay.
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The use of specific examples, like the mention of HR hiring practices and nurses' problem-solving, adds to the relevance of your argument and helps illustrate your points.
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