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learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local language if these are not taught many are at risk of dying out in your opinion is it important for everyone to learn English? should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so how?

In recent years
English
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 has become increasingly viral and has been the first language
worldwidly
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worldwide
. Some people believe that learning
English
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instead
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 of other
languages
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 is a waste of time ,
while
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 others think that it is useful and offers
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better knowledge for
students
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 essay will argue that both
English
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 and local
languages
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 are crucial for individuals On the one hand , One benefit of teaching
English
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 at school is to enhance
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 understanding and critical skills.
According to
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 a recent study people who are able to talk and write in
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 are more likely to get into universities and colleges or even get
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job offers.
This
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 suggests the importance of having a strong knowledge of
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 that will 
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 a sustainable future for individuals .
As a
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result
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this
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 will provide a greater ability to understand and enhance people's skills.
On the other hand
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 , Schools should
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 make sure that the local language
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also
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 being taught in order to prevent the
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students
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 identity. If the new generation are only taught in
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 they will not be allowed to communicate with their surrounding community members.
Consequently
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, they will feel more isolated and
this
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 will decrease their communication skills. So schools should ensure that their own language is used in the classrooms and between
students
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. In conclusion , both
English
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languages
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 are essential
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 in the education
systems
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.
However
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,
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 a balanced curriculum between these two
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languages
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students
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good knowledge and better communication.

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task achievement
Make sure that your introduction clearly outlines the key points you will discuss in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs have clear topic sentences that relate to the main argument of your essay.
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Use more specific examples to support your arguments and demonstrate your points effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the linking words and phrases between sentences to enhance the flow of your ideas.
content
You have conveyed the importance of both English and local languages well.
structure
Your essay has a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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