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Some people believe young generation should follow traditions of their society; others,​ however, believe that young people should be free to make their own choice as individuals.​ Discuss both views and give your own opinion.​

People believe that in our modern society, the youth should stick to their heritage
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 others believe they should be free to make their own choices. Sticking to your heritage and culture gives you a key to the world, following in the footsteps of your ancestors, which is what many people believe. Following one's
traditions
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 could both have a negative and positive influence
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 their career, whether it's their morals not aligning with their companies values, or making a living out of teaching others about their history and
traditions
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.
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, many argue that having the freedom to choose who you are in
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 world is more important than following
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. As individuals, growing up with no knowledge of your culture and ancestry
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 leads to a sense of
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. The young generation should be able to be their own people but should
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 stick to their own culture and beliefs
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 respecting others and being open to
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 other cultures. In conclusion,
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 discussion of whether the young generation should follow their
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 or be able to freely make their own decisions as individuals, the youth should have the freedom of choice and opinion, but
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not forget their roots.

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