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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table graph outlines data about
wages
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the wages
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 of
a high school instructors
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high school instructors
a high school instructor
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in five different nations in the year
of
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apply
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2009.
As well as
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 the data is categorized
by
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into
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 5 different columns.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that most high wages of high school teachers from
a
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the
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 starting level to the maximum experienced teachers are in Luxembourg nation.
On the contrary
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, the lowest wages are in Australia.
While
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 looking
in
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at
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 the details, the highest salary of a starter teacher is in
the
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apply
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Luxembourg as well,
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 the lowest is in Australia
similarliy
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similarly
.
However
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, Korean and
denmarkian
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Denmark in
 teachers
recieve
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receive
 the same amount in the level of 15 years
experience
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of experience
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. 
While
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 looking at the needed years to reach the maximum received salary, Japan and Korea, Luxembourg, Australia and Denmark, in order, were requiring 37 and 34 and 30 and 9 and 8 years, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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