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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts display what UK graduates and postgraduates did after graduation rather than enrolling in a full-time job in 2008.
Overall
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, the majority of them chose to complete their studies or find vacancies in part-time
work
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,
while
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 a small number of both categories opted for voluntary
work
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. Other students stayed unemployed. 
To begin
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 with, a substantial proportion of UK graduates were compelled to complete their studies ( 29,6650), and around 17,735 chose to
work
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 in a part-time job.
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, around 16,235 are destined to stay without
work
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. The minority of people ( 3,500) were interested in volunteering. 
On the contrary
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, the majority of UK Postgraduate students in 2008, around 2,725, preferred to pursue
further
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 study. An approximate number of people, about 2,535, preferred to
work
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 part-time. Around 1,625 people were meant to stay without a job, and only 345 students participated in volunteer
work
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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