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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant. Assel

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant. Assel
The diagrams illustrate an industrial area in the town of
Norbitorn
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Norton
,
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 and
planned
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the planned
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 future development of the site.
In two
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 maps
showing
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show
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 a dramatic transformation from an industrial area to
residential
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a residential
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 area. It will have
considerably
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 development for the future planning land. Factories were changed for housing, which has
upgoing
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ongoing
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 goals for the Norbitorn individuals.
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 the map,
in
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on
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 the east side
it
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there
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 will be new facilities for students –
school
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a school
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,
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and, playground
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playground
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a playground
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 – which has roads with accommodation. In the
center
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centre
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it
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there
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 will be new streets with modernized roads surrounding shops and
medical
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a medical
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center
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centre
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,
what
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 could help for people who live there.
However
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, eight factories will flatten, and
appears
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seven dwellings. It will be comfortable to live in Norbitorn. Vision for the future, farmland
in
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on
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north
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the north
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 side will relocate
in
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far away from town, up to the river
in
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on
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 the right. The new bridge will
build
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 over the river, the road will connect with big housing.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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