The diagram below shows how glass is recycled(EX)

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled(EX)
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows how glass is recycled(EX)
The diagram illustrates the recycling process of
glass
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, which
undergo
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undergoes
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various
tratments
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treatments
.
Overall
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, there are six stages in the circular process, beginning with throwing
glass
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into bins
ending
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and ending
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in delivering. The process commences when different types of
bottles
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made of
glass
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are collected in special recycling bins.
Then
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, some of
bins
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the bins
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are sent to a factory by truck in order to go through
treatment
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the treatment
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plant to reuse for some purposes. In the factory,
glass
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bottles
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are cleaned and sterilised in water with the help of machines In the next stages, clean
bottles
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are crushed, being under a pressing machine, and
then
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they are boiled and melted by fire in high temperatures. After that, liquid
glass
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is put into moulding machines with the same shape
of
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as
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bottles
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.
Finally
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, new redesigned
bottles
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are filled
to
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for
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sale and delivered to the supermarkets for human consumption. The main steps may
then
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be repeated all over again

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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