The pie charts show the figure for production of different products in 2 countries in million tons a year

The pie charts show the figure for production of different products in 2 countries in million tons a year
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the figure for production of different products in 2 countries in million tons a year
The static 2 graphs demonstrate a number of 5 various products manufactured in
Azerbaijan
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and
Georgia
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in
million
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tons
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by
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annually. Obviously seems that the highest
production
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in
Azerbaijan
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is
petrol
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,
furthermore
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,
wine
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is the most consumed product in
Georgia
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.
In
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particular
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particular,
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Azerbaijan
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is superior in the
production
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of
petrol
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and cotton, by the way,
Georgia
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excels in
wine
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,tea and seafood. It can
observe
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that
wine
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production
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has more importance in
Georgia
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than in
Azerbaijan
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. Because the measure of consumption of
wine
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is 175
million
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tons
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,
graph
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the graph
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shows that it is just 20
million
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tons
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in
Azerbaijan
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. The second huge difference between goods
happen
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in tea
production
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. It can be observed that the weight of tea
production
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is 120
million
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tons
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and 18
million
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tons
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accordingly
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respectively
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.
Moreover
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,
Georgia
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led the way in terms of
manufacture
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manufacturing
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in
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seafood products. Given that the amount of seafood goods is 100
million
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tons
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in
Georgia
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,but in
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azerbaijan
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Azerbaijan
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is 50
million
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tons
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.
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Azerbaijan
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economy depends on mostly
petrol
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products. Because the main
production
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of
Azerbaijan
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is
about
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petrol
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with 80
million
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tons
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. To compare the number is just 17
million
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tons
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in
Georgia
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.
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Furthermore
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Azerbaijan
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topped
list
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the list
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in terms of cotton
production
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with 55
million
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tons
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. It seems that 22
million
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tons
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in
Georgia
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words azerbaijan, georgia, million, tons, production, petrol, wine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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