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Band 5.5

The local council has some funds to invest in the neighborhood. They have asked for suggestions from the public. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • thank them for considering the public’s opinion • explain ways in which the funds can be utilised • offer some ways in which you can contribute to the council You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to extend my gratitude and give some recommendations related to funding projects to develop the neighbourhood. My name is Jack Adams, and I
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 a resident of
Willington
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the Willington
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 neighbourhood for over a decade now.
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, I would like to thank the council for giving the residents the opportunity to be part of
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 remarkable initiative that would definitely benefit everybody living within it,
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 share any related concerns. Since
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 there
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 been many considerable issues related to the transportation system and the intersections connecting roads to the main street. I would like to request investing in renovating the transportation means providing more vehicles and improving the roads connecting to the main streets, which is affecting people's daily commute and
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 regular check-ups to sustain the services.
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, I would like to offer assistance whether it was gathering concerns of the people to facilitate communication with the council or conveying any messages from the council to the community.
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, once the project
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 to take place, I would like to volunteer in any role to help with the
develop
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 of the neighbourhood. Once again, thank you, and hope my suggestions are taken into consideration.
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 faithfully, Jack Adams

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down your suggestions into distinct paragraphs for clarity, ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single idea related to the funding recommendations.
task achievement
Make sure to include a more detailed explanation of the issues with the transportation system to strengthen your recommendations.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure proper sentence structure and grammar when expressing your ideas, particularly in phrases like 'whether it was gathering concerns' which could be restructured for clarity.
task achievement
You expressed gratitude and provided a clear request for funding, showing appreciation for the council's initiative.
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Your willingness to assist the council and engage with the community is commendable and reflects a positive attitude towards community development.
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