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The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment

The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment
The table depicts
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of money
spend
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spent
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 on four different sectors in five
european
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European
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 countries.
Overall
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, upon comparing different countries,
majority
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the majority
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 of the income was contributed
on
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to
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 groceries and house items,
while
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 the lowest was spent on clothing and entertainment.
While
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 Turkey and Spain
had
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apply
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contributed the highest
on
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to
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 food and drinks, with 36 % and 31 % respectively, the proportion of income contributed by those countries
on
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to
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 housing was the lowest with about 20
percentage
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. Customers from France, Germany and the
Uk
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UK
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 were more interested
on
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in
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 household items, paying above 30
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percentage
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per cent
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
 the clothing and entertainment sectors had the lowest contribution, Germany
had
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apply
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paid the most with a
percentage
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 of 15% and 19 % respectively. The
Uk's
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UK's
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 contribution
on
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to
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 these sections
were
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was
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 similar with 11
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percentage
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per cent
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.
Although
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, Spain and
France
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France's
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expenditure
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expenditures
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 on clothing were the lowest, spending just about 8
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percentage
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per cent
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, the proportion of their income spent on entertainment was about 15 %,
reaching
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apply
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similar to Germany's contribution
on
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to
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 clothing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • speculate
  • real estate
  • average income
  • trends
  • significant differences
  • lifestyle
  • surprising findings
  • notable patterns
  • economic priorities
  • living standards
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