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The chart below shows the number (thousands) of four kinds of students in the UK in 1990, 1998 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number (thousands) of four kinds of students in the UK in 1990, 1998 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of four
catagories
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categories
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students
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of students
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 in the
uk
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UK
 in three
seperate
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separate
 years.
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, the figures
of
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for
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 all kinds of
students
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 showed significant increases, except minor
flutuations
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fluctuations
. And despite genders, there
were
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 no obvious preference between
full
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full-time
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time
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 and
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part
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part-time
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time
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. In detail, the people of Males-Full
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time
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the time
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 peaked at 200 in 1990, closely followed by
Females-Full
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females during
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time
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the time
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with
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of
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 nearly 190
students
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. And approximately 180 male
students
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 chose
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part
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part-time
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time
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,
whereas
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 lower females opted for it
at
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apply
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150, the lowest point over the period. In 1998, the figures of males
chose
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who chose
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full
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full-time
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time
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 was the highest at 300,
while
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 they showed little interest in
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part
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part-time
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time
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 with only 150.
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, in terms of females' options,
wether
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whether
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full
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full-time
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 or
part
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time
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 both rose to 220 and 200, respectively. In 2005, the number of female
students
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 slightly surpassed that of male
students
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 both
in
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apply
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part
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part-time
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time
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 and
full
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full-time
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time
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. 800 males were
full
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full-time
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time
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students
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 and the people of males-
part
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time
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 climbed to 790.
Additionally
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,
Females-Full
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female full-time
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time
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students
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 reached a peak at 810.
This
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 was followed by
Females-
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females part
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part
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time
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 at 800
students
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, time, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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