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Band 4.5

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their houses rather than buy their housees. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

Recent
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In recent
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 years,
som
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some
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 individual prefer
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rent
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to rent
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 their
houses
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 rather than
buying
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buy
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 new
houses
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. In my
person
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personal
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opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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 firmly agree with the statement because
i
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I
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 believe
rent
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houses
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 cost less than buying
new
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a new
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 department .
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However
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However,
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pepole
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people
 may change their area
because
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because of
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 some consequences
such
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 as
weather
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the weather
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 or
far
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being far
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 away from
city
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the city
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 .
According to
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 the
a bove
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above
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 statement, Buying new
houses
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 cost too much
than
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more than
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rent
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 day because
rent
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 house
it
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apply
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is for
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a limit
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limit
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limited
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perod
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period
 of life
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 Student graduate ,Employees,
New
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and New
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 couples .
This
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 group of
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pepole
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people
 may have
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a limit
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limit
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limited
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bdget
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budget
.
Its
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It
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 may be hard to
handel
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handle
 the cost of new
houses
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 or they did not even sure about a place to live ,From my experience my parents
change
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changed
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 the town approximately five
time
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times
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 because they
struggel
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struggled
about
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with
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ther
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the
their
opportunity
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opportunities
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on
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in
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 a many town and cities .
Additionlally
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Additionally
, Some individual
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pepole
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people
 prefer to
rent
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houses
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 because
the
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of the
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 weather because they used to live
on
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in
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 their country .
moreover
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,Employees
is
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are
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 the major
resone
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reason
 to
rent
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houses
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 because they are
runing
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running
 after the
chances
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chance
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 and opportunity to get high salaries and
good
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a good
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 position
on
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in
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 their career .
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Also
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Also,
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 more point to add about
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the weather
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weather
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whether
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 some
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pepole
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people
wether
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weather
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 may affect their mood so as result , They can not
foucs
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focus
 on their study or work .
For
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instance
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instance,
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 my
unckle
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uncle
decide
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decided
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 to
complete
Verb problem
take
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 his
bacholar
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birthday
 on us because
on
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in
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 our town it is
alwayes
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always
 sunny and it
is affect
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affects
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 his mental health .
On
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In
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 conclusion.
overall
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 , The
advantagece
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advantage
advantages
 of
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rent
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renting
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houses
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 rather than buying
new
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a new
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house
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houses
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 are more than
disadvangece
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disadvantage
. In my opinion ,
limit
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the limit
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 of budget and the opportunity for
student
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students
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 and employees make the idea of
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rent
Wrong verb form
renting
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houses
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much
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a much
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 logical chance to choose because it
is make
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makes
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 their lives
easiler
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easier
 to transform .

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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and provides supporting details.
language
Try to improve your grammar and spelling. Errors can impact the readability of your essay, so proofread your work before submission.
task achievement
Include more specific examples or evidence to support your arguments. This will strengthen your points and make your essay more persuasive.
task achievement
You have addressed both advantages and disadvantages of renting, which shows an understanding of the topic.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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