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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides data on the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in part-time jobs in four countries — Australia, New
Zealand
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, the United Kingdom, and the United
States
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 — for the years 2003 and 2006. It
also
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 shows the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in each country in 2006.
Overall
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, the United
States
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 had the highest total
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in both years,
while
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 New
Zealand
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 had the lowest.
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, when comparing the figures relative to the population (per 1,000
people
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), New
Zealand
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 had the highest proportion,
whereas
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 the United
States
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 had the lowest in 2006. In 2003, the
number
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 of migrant
workers
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 in the United
States
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 was 577,000, which increased to 678,000 by 2006. Australia followed with 152,000
workers
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 in 2003, showing a noticeable gap compared to the US. In 2006, New
Zealand
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 had the smallest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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, with only 87,000. When looking at the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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 in 2006, New
Zealand
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 led with 21.1, indicating a high concentration relative to its population. Australia followed with 10.7,
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 the United Kingdom had 4.4. The United
States
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, despite having the largest absolute
number
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, had only 2.3
workers
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 per 1,000
people
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, showing the lowest density among the four countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, zealand, states, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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