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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
the line graph
display
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displays
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 the
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 levels of three categories of petrol,
such
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 as
Petroleum
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, natural
gas
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, and coal in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom from 1981 to 2000
overall
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, there was
significant
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a significant
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 decrease
of
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in
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 coal,
while
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 natural
gas
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 and
petroleum
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steadly
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steadily
steady
increase
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increased
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 in
20 years
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the 20-year
 period. Since 1981, the fuel of coal
strike
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strikes
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decline
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declined
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 from 80
energy
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 units and the lowest was around 25
energy
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 in 2000. The others,
petroleum
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 and natural
gas
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 had
lowest
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the lowest
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energy
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 unit in 1991.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
petroleum
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had
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apply
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fluctuated stage in 1991 and
come
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came
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 back
increasing
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to increasing
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 in 1993
foloowed
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followed
 by natural almost the same year
with
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as
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petroleum
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,
this
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 petrol had
significant
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a significant
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 soaring around 10 years until 2000.
Nevertheless
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, natural
gas
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 only had 100
energy
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 units no more than
petroleum
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 can gain approximately 140 units. That was the highest unit
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petroleum
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of petroleum
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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