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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts Edmonton's data regarding transportation and the
use
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 of vehicles. The units are measured in per cent.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that normal cars are the most used method
to
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of
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 transport.
In addition
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, light rail transit occupies a large proportion of 35
percent
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per cent
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 of the
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,
whereas
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 bus and taxi
using
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is
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 not popular as they are less than
quarter
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a quarter
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the
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of the
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 total proportion with 10
percentage
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per cent
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 each.
According to
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 what is shown, cars and taxis correspond to more than half the percentage, with 55%.
Which
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This
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 might be
due to
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 the less time it takes in comparison to the other
to
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two
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trasporting
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transporting
 methods. In terms of LRT and buses, they occupy 45% which is less than
the
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apply
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half of the total car
use
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 by 5 percentage points. People tend to
use
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 them more when there are no urgent duties, like leisure activities or shopping.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transportation modes
  • car ownership
  • proportion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • transportation habits
  • environmental awareness
  • government policies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • environmental quality
  • future implications
  • adapt
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