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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the unemployment rates among females in four countries of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
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, in 2013, England and Scotland had the highest female unemployment rates,
while
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 Northern Ireland had the lowest. In 2014, the figures changed slightly across all four countries, with some fluctuations. In 2013, the percentage of unemployed women in England was 6.8%, followed by Scotland at 6.7%. Wales recorded 5.4%,
while
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 Northern Ireland had a slightly higher rate of 5.6%. In 2014, Scotland recorded the highest rate again at 6.7%,
whereas
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 Northern Ireland had the lowest at 4.6%. England’s rate dropped slightly to 6.5%, and Wales experienced a decrease to 5%, showing a 1.5% difference from the previous year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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