IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key data about the classes that contributed to India’s gross domestic product between 1960 and 2000. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
Linking Words
 it is clear from the graph that the sector
Services
Use synonyms
 soared over the years.
In addition
Linking Words
, the class
industry
Use synonyms
 did not change in ratio much.
Whereas
Linking Words
, the least amount of products was
Agriculture
Use synonyms
 in 2000.
According to
Linking Words
 what is shown, in 1960, the highest per cent was
agriculture
Use synonyms
 around two-thirds, and
services
Use synonyms
 and
industry
Use synonyms
 were similar by nearly 15%.
while
Linking Words
, in the year 1970,
agriculture
Use synonyms
 decreased to almost 54%,
services
Use synonyms
 went over a fifth, and the
industry
Use synonyms
 went up by 20%.
However
Linking Words
, during 1980,
services
Use synonyms
 increased gradually to 26%, the
industry
Use synonyms
 had a modest increase , and
agriculture
Use synonyms
 declined to 47%. In terms of the year 1990,
agriculture
Use synonyms
 dropped by one-
third,
Linking Words
increasing
industry
Use synonyms
 to 45%.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, during 2000,
services
Use synonyms
 significantly increased to about two-thirds,
industry
Use synonyms
 remained stable , and
agriculture
Use synonyms
 plunged by 15%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words services, industry, agriculture with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: