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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the pie graphs illustrate the percentage of
water
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consumed
consumped
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consumption
 for
multiples
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multiple
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 goals in six
areas
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 of the world
overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
paragrphe
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paragraph
paragraphs
compare
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compares
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water
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 used. farmers accounted
primary
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for primary
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 spent respectively in often of proportion
areas
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 meanwhile dropped in other two
areas
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.
however
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, Industrial use increased dramatically in Europe and North America.
whereas
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, Domestic witnessed
least
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the least
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consumped
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consumed
 with regard to Central Asia
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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of
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apply
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farmers used exact at 88% of
water
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 and it was
highest
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the highest
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 proportion as
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a siginficant
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siginficant
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significant
 item.
whereas
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, Africa used
precise
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precisely
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 at 84% as
second
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the second
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consump
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consume
 for Agricultural. meanwhile, South East Asia accounted
thierd
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third
 spent
for
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on
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water
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exact
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apply
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at 81% respectively,
in addition
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, South America
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lastest
latest
leastest
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was lowest
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 on Agricultural precise at 71% In terms of Industrial Use Europe was
most
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the most
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consumper
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consumer
 precise at 53%
as
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a
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huge
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a huge
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 percentage
on
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of
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this
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 item.
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Nevertheless
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 it is not alone, North
America
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America's
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 second intake or utilization for Industrial use.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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 Domestic accounted least intake in
whole
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the whole
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 figure for all
areas
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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