The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three countries

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three countries
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three countries
The tabular data contains
the
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information related to the fraction of elderly people in three different nations in
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year
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1998 and 2000,
also
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including the anticipation of
same
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the same
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group's
population
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in 2013. In
a
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1988, Germany had the highest ratio of people
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aged
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65 and above,
where as
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only 16% of the total
population
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in
Canada
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work
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differentiated in the elderly group. In
a
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the
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UK, nearly 15% of the
inhabitance
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inhabitants
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over aged 65 and over.
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, after 12 years the ratio in
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Canada
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and Germany increased by 5% and only one percent
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was seen in the UK.
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, in listing the assumptions of
aged
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the aged
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people
population
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after 3 decades, it can be stated that
Canada
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will evidence decreased death rates at
higher
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a higher
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level resulting
increases
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in increased
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population
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density of the matured individuals.
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to that in
Canada
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, Germany and the UK are supposed to provide lively would to 30% and 20% of
elderly
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the elderly
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population
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, respectively.
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, in all three countries, the proportion was increased by certain numbers and the same
of
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as
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predicted for
next
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the next
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30 years, but by more value
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than then
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then
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the
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previous one.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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