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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
provides
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provided
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 figure
compare
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compares
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to
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apply
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the variation
that is
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 the various types of transportation in four states
.there
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There
is
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are
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 five types of transportation ways
such
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 as car,
bicycle
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 ,public transport and walking .
Overall
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 it is evident that
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 prefer to
ues
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use
the
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apply
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cars
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instence
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instance
 in
the
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apply
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Canada
citizen
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citizens
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 prefer to
use
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the
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apply
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cars
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 it
was increase
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was increased
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 was 90
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percentage
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per cent
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while
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 the
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bicycle
Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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who is
Verb problem
apply
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used
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 lowest than
cars
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 and
another
Correct quantifier usage
other
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 transportation
ways
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way
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was
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were
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 1
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percentage .
Correct your spelling
per cent. In
in addition
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 the Belgium the proportion of
the
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apply
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people
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 who
use
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the
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apply
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cars
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 was 72
percentage
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.
While
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 in
same
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the same
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 state Belgium who
use
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 the
bicycle
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 was lowest was 2
percentage
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 .
in addition
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 the citizens in Canada who
use
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the
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a
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 car to go to
the
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apply
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work 30
percentage
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 of
people
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 .
According to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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 in the chart
the
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apply
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most Canadian
people
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are used
Wrong verb form
use
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cars
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to
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as
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alternative
Fix the agreement mistake
alternatives
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. to illustrate the table in the
garmeny
Correct your spelling
garment
 who is used the
cars
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 was increase it was 68
percentage
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.
While
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 citizens in Germany who
use
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 the
bicycle
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was decrease
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was decreased
was decreasing
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 it was 2
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percentage
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per cent
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.
To sum
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up
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up,
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 the proportion of the employees in
the
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apply
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Canada and Belgium prefer to
driving
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drive
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the
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a
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 car to
treval
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travel
work places
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workplaces
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bicycle, people, cars, use, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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