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Writing Samples
Band 5

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inquire about
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the dyson
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dyson
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Dyson
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 product and would like to buy
if
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it if
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 you have
in
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it in
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 stock. I am living on the eglinton street and your shop is very near by my house. I decided to buy the product from your shop
as well as
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 I had purchased many items before from your store. I found that your customer service is highly reliable
along with
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 products. I want to gather some information on
whole
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the whole
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 set of Dyson including
curler
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the curler
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, straightener and dryer. I know these items are
on
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in
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 high demand it is difficult to get them
straigjt
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straight
 away when to order. If you don't have
in
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them in
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 stock would you please check if you can arrange them for me within two weeks
.
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?
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Also
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, I know Dyson is very expensive but I don't have any problem. I have only one concern currently I am out of town and will be back after two weeks. I want to ask if you can hold the products for two weeks. I would like to know the price of
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the equipments
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and I can pay through E-transfer. Let me know if you can arrange the product as
weel
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well
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 as
price
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the price
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. I look forward to your prompt reply. Yours Sincerely, Saibir.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using separate paragraphs for different topics, like your request for specific products and information about pricing. This could improve the clarity of your letter.
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Make sure to check spelling errors, such as 'straigjt' instead of 'straight' and 'as weel' instead of 'as well'. Such mistakes can distract from the overall quality of your writing.
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You established a connection with the shop by mentioning your past positive experiences, which adds a personal touch to your letter.
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Your tone is friendly and polite throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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