The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates how many
students
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of both sexes enrolled in six art subjects(linguistics, philosophy,
English
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language
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and
literature
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, history and
archeology
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archaeology
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, art and design, and communication and
medis
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media
) in
UK
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a UK
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university in 2011.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
female
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females
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studying in the six art subjects outnumbered the male
students
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. The highest
number
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of male and female
students
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enrolled in
English
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language
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and
literature
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subject
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subjects
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whereas
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the lowest
number
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of male
students
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enrolled in philosophy compared to female
students
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studying history and
archeology
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archaeology
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. Regarding female
students
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, the highest
number
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was 250 for
students
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studying
English
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language
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and
literature
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whereas
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the second top
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was around 240 for female
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who were studying linguistics. The lowest
number
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was about 120
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enrolled in
history
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the history
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and
archeology
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archaeology
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department.
Similarly
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, the highest
number
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of male
students
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was enrolled in
English
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language
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and
literature
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with around 230
students
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.
In contrast
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, the lowest
number
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of male
students
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is 50
students
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studying philosophy. About 202
students
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were studying communication and media study coming in
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second place after
English
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language
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and
literature
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, english, language, literature, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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