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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided
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 bar chart illustrates how
percentage
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the percentage
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 of two
household
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 types in England and Wales has
been
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changed from 1918 to
the
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2011.
Overall
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, over
a
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an
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 83-year period, home ownership consistently surged,
while
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 rental accommodations experienced
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a steadily
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steadily
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 drop. Looking at the details, despite the fact that between 1939 and 1953 these trends remained steady, until 1971, rental residents lead over owned
accomodations
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accommodations
. Before
sharp
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the sharp
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 decline of home ownership by 10%, mentioned two types of
household
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 accommodations were equal in 1971. After
significant
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a significant
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 rocket of
former
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the former
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 trend, between 1991 and 2001 it
ramained
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remained
 stable, and reached
the
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 peak at approximately 70%, whilst, the latter type of
household
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 accommodation reached the
lowet
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lowest
 point at 30%. Over the period of
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 10 years,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
household
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 owners slightly increased by
roughtly
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roughly
 5%. Meanwhile, the latter trend dropped for
first
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the first
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 time after 83 years of continuous growth
,
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 and surged to approximately 68% in 93 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • households
  • ownership
  • percentage
  • trend
  • rise
  • decline
  • surpass
  • peak
  • societal attitudes
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