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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
The graph compared
between
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the expenditure
of
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 fish
as well as
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 types of meat in countries European over a
period
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 from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart chicken was higher Trent than other categories,
whereas
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 beef and lamb were the most noticeable change
occoured
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occurred
in contrast
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, fish
is stay
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 the Lower level in the chart .
To begin
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 with, in 1979, the number of beef
was
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decreased from
an
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approximately 230 to under 200 per week in the year 1984, compared
chicken
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 increased from around 150 to just below 200 per
weeek
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week
. Meanwhile , lamb
showed
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apply
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experience
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 a dramatic decline in the general trend ,
although
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it
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growth
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in
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at
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 the end
the
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of the
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period
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 . In
term
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 of fish consistently decreased over the
period
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 , it saw below 50 each week , the lowest point in the entire
period
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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