The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the proportions of
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online
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of store
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section
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in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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travel
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section
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accounted for the largest
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in 2003, but over the years, film and music became the highest portion by 2003. Meanwhile, both books and clothes were never higher than
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both in 2003 and 2013. Travel comprised the biggest segment in 2003, at 36
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percent
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, and dropped slightly to 29% in 2013. In
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contrast
,
film
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the film
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/music
section
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started at 21% in 2003. After that, it rose steadily to 33
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in 2013, making it the largest amount of online
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retail
section
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. Regarding
books
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the books
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section
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, it increased slightly from 19% to 22% from 2003 to 2013,
while
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clothing
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the clothing
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sector fell
down
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from 24
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percent
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to 16
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percent
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in the same period. Both of them were considered the lowest
contributers
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contributors
to
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online
sales
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and they never
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more than 25
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percent
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of total online
sales
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, section, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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