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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
the graph shows the percentage of
australian
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Australian
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exports
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 in different four countries from 1990
ro
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to
 2012. As all as,
the
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apply
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Japan and
the
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apply
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China had the
bigest
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biggest
highest
number
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 of
exports
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 , there attend 30% and 17%
approximetly
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approximately
.
Furthermore
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, the US and India had the lowest
number
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 of
exports
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 .
First,
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the
india
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India
Indian
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 esports commenced from 2% in 1990 and rose to attend the 6% in 2012.
For instance
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, the
Us
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US
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exports
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 started with 13% 1990 of
exports
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 and decreased to 7% in 2012. Plus, Japan
commenced
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increased
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 from 27% in 1990 and fell to 18 % in 2012the
number
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 one in the .
For instance
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, the
number
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 one in
exports
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 is
china
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China
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strated
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started
with
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at
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 3% in 1990 and reached a peak to attend the 30% of
exports
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 in 2012 .
To conclude
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 , China had the
bigest
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biggest
highest
number
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 of
exports
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 in 2012
wich
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which
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 is the
number
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 one in the industry and
unrivaled
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unrivalled
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for instance".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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