The line graph gives information about the number of employment in the three sectors of the economy which is located in UK

The line graph gives information about the number of employment in the three sectors of the economy which is located in UK
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph gives information about the number of employment in the three sectors of the economy which is located in UK
The line graph gives information about the number of employment in the three sectors of the economy which is located in
UK
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the UK
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over a ten-year
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from 2000-2010 At a glance, what stands out from the statistics is that were shown
a
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the
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fluctuate
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trends
both
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in both
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the public
sector
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and self-employment over the periods. Meanwhile, the private
sector
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experienced a gradual
fell
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fall
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over two other sectors. Looking at details, as regards
public
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the public
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sector
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,
number
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a number
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of employment started
just
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at just
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under 40 in 2000,
then
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the figure levelled off in the following year before went up considerably until 2005 approximately just under 50. At that
point
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the figure experienced a slight decline in
rate
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the rate
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of
employments
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employment
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around 45 in 2006.
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Subsequently
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consistently
increase
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increased
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over the periods and met the peak of the rate
in
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at
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end
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the end
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of
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period
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the period
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roughly about just above 50.
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, self-employment saw similar trends with public sectors and
reaching
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the
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a
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peak at
end
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the end
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of
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period
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the period
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with 30 rates of employment. Unfortunately, if we focus on
private
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the private
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sector
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, it started as the most popular
sector
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than
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then
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others
accounted
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for just under 50,t in the following years, the figure experienced a gradual
fell
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over the
period
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and became the lowest unpopular
sector
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over
others
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other sectors
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sector
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proven with only 20.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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