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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 bar graph illustrates the comparison of average annual spending in five major categories in the USA, Canada, the
UK
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 and
Japan
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 in 2009.
Overall
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, housing was highlighted with the highest levels of expenditures in all countries, as opposed to healthcare held the lowest money-spending rank.
Initially
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, housing was higher than other sectors of the USA and Canada accounting for 22% and 26% respectively which is followed by more than 15% in both of them. The figure for food remained relatively constant with approximately 15% in the year 2009.
By contrast
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, the percentage of healthcare and clothing was ranked
last
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 compared to other groups.
According to
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 the expenditure of
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Japan
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, the
UK
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 housing expense rates
was
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were
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 more than the remaining nations,
whereas
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,
the
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apply
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food was
a
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apply
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dominant being spent
on
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in
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Japan
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. The figure for food in
Japan
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 and the housing rate in the
UK
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 was holding a steady position with around
at
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22%. The proportion of transportation in the
UK
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 was more than
Japan
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 1.5 times which is 15%, and 10% respectively,
while
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 clothing and healthcare had the lowest percentage of both countries with merely 5%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • shares
  • major
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • trends
  • observations
  • patterns
  • highest
  • lowest
  • spending
  • features
  • 2009
  • Japan
  • United Kingdom
  • Canada
  • United States
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