The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp

The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999. gp
The graphs
gives
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give
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information about the
the
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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to and from the
UK
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during a period of 20
years
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,
as well as
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the most countries
that
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apply
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visited by
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UK
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the UK
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population.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of
visitors
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to and from the
UK
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escalated throughout the given
years
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,
while
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the
popular
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most popular
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country that
have
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has
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been visited by
UK
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people was France. Looking at greater
detial
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detail
, the visits abroad by the
UK
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population stood at 10
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millions
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million
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in 1979 and increased to over 50
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millions
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million
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in 20
years
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.
As well as
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,
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apply
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the
overseas
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number of overseas
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visitors
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visitor's
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number rose through the
years
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and reached almost 30
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millions
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million
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at the end
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of the given period. Spain and France
remain
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remained
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the dominant destinations in 1999 by the United Kingdom population with almost 10
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millions
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million
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tourists. Following that the USA and Greece with less than 5
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millions
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million
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visitors
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. The least favoured country was Turkey with approximately 2
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millions
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million
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visitors
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from the
UK
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people.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, years, visitors, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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