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Nowadays, people make new friends with the use of social networks and internet chat groups. Some of the people think this is good. other people thinks that face-to-face conversations is beneficial. discuss both sides.

These days and in
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 era we are living a great transformation in our lifestyles, including the way we meet
people
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, a
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 of
people
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 try to keep the traditional method of meeting. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss both aspects. Meeting new
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 through social networks is not something updated or popular, a
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 of
people
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use
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 dating apps to marry or to find their love. And
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, a
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 of
people
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 prefer meeting in person. All the ways have their own advantage and
disadvantage
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, which one is better than depends on you. some
people
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 are too shy in person so, they
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internet
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 chat to meet new friends and
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 chatting is good
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 for long-distance relationships.
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 because when you
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 the
Internet
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 you can meet
people
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 all over the world. But
this
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 way may affect your communication skills over time. If you get to
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 apps and the
internet
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 to make new friends that's going to lower your reactions in real life regardless of how social you are. Some
people
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 prefer face-to-face meetings and believe it's better because they can feel the other's energy and vibes .
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,
this
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 way has
also
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 its advantages the most essential one is
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 sometimes costs you a
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. If you planning to hang out with someone in some cultures if you invite him you must pay him.
To sum up
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, both ways are effective and work and both have negative and positive aspects.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly introduce your points in each paragraph. You should have clear topic sentences that relate directly to your thesis.
task achievement
Try to give more examples and details to support your points. This will help make your ideas clearer and stronger.
grammar and language
Use correct verb forms and article usage throughout your essay. For example, 'people think this is good' instead of 'people thinks this is good'.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument, which is important for a balanced discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Convenience
  • Anonymity
  • Socially anxious
  • Introverts
  • Diverse cultures
  • Perspectives
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Body language
  • Facial expressions
  • Emotional bonds
  • Trust
  • Meaningful interactions
  • Sustained conversations
  • Distractions
  • Social skills
  • Effective communication
  • Empathy
  • Active listening
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