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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following charts illustrate information about
migration
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 to the United Kingdom. The first graph
indicate
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indicates
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 the length of the
immigrants
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 between 200 and 2008, the pie chart
demonstrate
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 the reasons
of
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for
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migration
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 in 2008.
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, it can be said that the intended
period
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 of stay of
immigrants
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 had
drastted
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drafted
dratted
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while
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 the main reason for
migration
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 was reported as work in the given time It is observed that the number of
immigrants
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than
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that
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 desired to stay up to 2
years
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 was recorded as 150,000 for the first two
years
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 which
this
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 value had increased to 25000by 2004 and remained
as
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the same till the end of the
period
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. Meanwhile, those who had the
intensions
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intentions
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 to stay for 4
years
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 or longer had been documented as 150,000
contime
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continue
time
 for the entire
period
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.
Immigrants
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 who
also
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 aimed to stay for 2 to 4
years
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 had
mia
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major
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fluctutions
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fluctuations
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 as the timeline resumed,being 50,000 and
100,000at
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100,000 at
 the
beginnings
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beginning
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 and the end of the
period
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 respectively. Inspecting the pie charts, the most common reasons
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migration
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for migration
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was
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were
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 found to be worts with 38%, followed by studying with almost a third. Accompanying a family is the third common reason; by a.
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, other and no reason stated options share the same
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percentage
percantage
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percentage
 of %7, both being placed on final

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words migration, immigrants, period, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigrate
  • emigrate
  • migration
  • immigrant
  • intended length of stay
  • short-term stay
  • long-term stay
  • trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • primary reasons
  • comparative analysis
  • contributing factors
  • data interpretation
  • work-related migration
  • study-related migration
  • family reunification
  • asylum seeking
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