You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

Dear sir, I am writing
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letter to you regarding the problems
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am facing in the
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room
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currently and want to request
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another
room
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in the following term. As,
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my
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first semester
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this
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course and
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am trying to put everything together.
The things
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are extremely complicated and managing everything is really hard. Meanwhile,
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am facing some issues within my
room
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. At the time, when rooms were given, I knew that
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will
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be sharing the
room
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with one other girl and
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was completely fine with that. But
nowdays
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, so many of her friends are coming
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the
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to chill and for parties which
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my entire work schedule.
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,
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am unable to complete my studies and lacking behind in the course.
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, the other day, somebody took my laptop charger without asking and at
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last
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they lost the item. When I
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, they refused to pay for the item too. All these things are affecting my mental health too.
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,
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want to request that kindly issue me a personal
room
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and I am more than happy to share
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the washroom
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and
kichen
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kitchen
area with other people for the coming term. So, that
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could focus on my studies as next semester's curriculum is harder as
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to the current one. I am looking forward
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your reply and please consider my concerns
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making a decision. Best regards, ABC

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your thoughts into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
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Be careful with grammar and spelling. Use capital letters where needed, like 'I' and the start of sentences.
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Make your request clear at the beginning. This will help the reader understand your main point quickly.
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You clearly explained your issues and how they affect you.
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Your letter has a polite tone, which is great when making a request.
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