The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart provided the proportion of adults who studied
full
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full-time
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time
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or
part
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part-time
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time
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in three periods of
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, the genders were men and women and measured in thousands, in
United
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the United
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Kingdom.
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, the two genders took part-
time
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study more than full-
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. Meanwhile, the number of men
had
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who had
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further
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education larger than women.
However
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, there were significant changes
in particular
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years between the two kinds of education. In terms of
gentleman
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, the amount of men who studied
part
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part-time
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time
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hit one million in 1970/71,
then
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slightly
decline
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to 800
thousand
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in the following
period
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, after that, it went up and stopped at around 850
thousand
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.
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, the data
of
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on
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full
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full-time
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time
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schooling gradually increased from nearly 100,
then
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150 and hit the top at 200
thousand
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in the
period
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of 1990/91.
On the other hand
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, the rate of
female
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females
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who took either
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or
part
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part-time
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time
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education gradually went up in all three periods of
time
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. There were about 50
thousand
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women who studied full
time
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in 1970/71,
then
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the
statistic
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grew
up
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remarkably in the next
period
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to nearly 200
thousand
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.
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period
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, the figure was the same as with the number of guys who studied full
time
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. From 1970/71 to 1980/81, the difference was virtually
by
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50
thousands
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thousand
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. The remarkable increase was in 1990/91 when the total rocketed hit from 800 to 1150, as the era changed more and more
female
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females
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were allowed to study.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, thousand, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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