The chartss below showwhat UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts illustrate the destinations of UK graduate and
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postgraduate
students who did not enter into full-time employment after leaving college in 2008.
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,
further
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study was the most common option for both
graduates
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and postgraduates,
while
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voluntary
work
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was the least popular. The number of
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in each category was significantly higher than that of postgraduates. Among
graduates
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, the majority 29,665 chose to pursue
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study, followed by 17,735 who engaged in part-time
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.
Umemployment
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Unemployment
affected 16,235
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,
whereas
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only 3,500 took voluntary
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.
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, in the postgraduate group, 2,725
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went on to
further
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study, making it the most popular choice.
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was followed by part-time
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at
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2,535 students, and unemployment, which affected 1,625 individuals. As with graduate, voluntary
work
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was the least chosen path, with just 345
puplis
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people
.

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