The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions wich result from energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions wich result from energy use.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions wich result from energy use.
The
diagrame
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diagram
illustrates how
enery
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energy
is used in an average
australian
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Australian
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household
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. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions
wich
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which
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result from energy use.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the biggest figure in
household
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energy use is heating.
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However
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However,
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in
household
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greenhouse gas
emissions
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emissions,
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the biggest is water heating.
Furthermore
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in both the smallest figure is cooling. In
household
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greenhouse gas emissions
refrigeretion
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refrigeration
and lighting
two
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are two
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times bigger than in
household
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energyuse
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energy use
energy-use
. Heating is bigger than heating in energy use by 45%

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words household with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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