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Your manager has asked you to arrange a programme for the first day at work of a new employee. You can only be there for the morning Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - Explain why you can only be there for the morning. - ⁠say how you could help the new employee in the morning. - ⁠suggest what the new employee could do in the afternoon.

Dear sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to apologise for not being in
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office
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the office
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 to help the new joinee in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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,
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however
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however,
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i
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I
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 will be there in
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the morining
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morining
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morning
 to assist him in
my
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the
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 best way. To
begun
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begin
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, the reason why
i
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I
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 am not available in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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 is that
i
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I
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 have
pre-scheduled
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a pre-scheduled
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 appointment with my doctor for
eye
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an eye
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 exam and it is mandatory for me to attend it. As we have a new employee coming
tommorow
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tomorrow
, I will be
assiting
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assisting
 him in
morning
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the morning
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 by introducing him to all
other
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the other
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 people
woking
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working
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 in our faculty.
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, I will assign some tasks to him and will inform
about
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him about
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 all the resources required to accomplish those tasks.
In addition
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, when I will be not in
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office
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the office
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 in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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 I will arrange
the
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a
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 short meeting of
new
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the new
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 employee with my secretary.
As she
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She
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 will guide him about the
office
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 infrastructure and
handover
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hand over
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 all the material of
office
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 policies to read which will help new
employee
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employees
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 to give
his
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their
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 best to the job. I am looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you and please understand my
sitituation
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situation
. Yours faithfully Karanveer

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grammar
Make sure to use proper spelling, such as 'morning' instead of 'morining' and 'situation' instead of 'situtation'.
coherence
Try to have clearer paragraph divisions with each idea to improve readability.
clarity
Always keep your sentences clear and direct. For example, 'I will assist him to the best of my ability.' would sound better.
content
You have clearly explained your reason for being unavailable in the afternoon.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prior commitment
  • scheduled meeting
  • personal obligation
  • unavailable
  • initial tasks
  • key team members
  • office tour
  • mandatory online training
  • company materials
  • shadowing
  • daily work processes
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