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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018 Closures - Openings 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 2018

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018 Closures - Openings 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 2018
The line chart provides key data about the number of stories that closed and opened between 2011 and 2018. The units are measured in figures.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that in 2011, the new
shops
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 had the biggest number of openings.
In addition
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, the sum of
shops
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 that closed was the largest in the year 2013,
whereas
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, in 2015, the least amount of
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 closed.
According to
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 what is shown in 2012, the sum of places that closed was around 6,000, increasing gradually to 7,000 in 2013, and decreasing to 6,500.
Furthermore
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, in 2015, had significantly declined to nearly 900 stories, and majorly soared to 5,000
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 in the year 2017. In terms of places that opened in 2013, there were many more
shops
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 opened than closed almost 7,000, in 2015, decreased to around 4,000, and was stable over the years until 2018, went down to 3,000 places.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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