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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.energy capacity in 2015 and 2040

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.energy capacity in 2015 and 2040
The given charts demonstrate the proportion of energy capacity in different types in 2015 and 2040.
Overall
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, The figure for fossil fuels is the dominant source in both years
although
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 those fell significantly.
In contrast
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, the number of solar
power
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 is projected to see a significant rise
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the
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nuclear
power
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 is expected to remain the smallest proportion. Look at the charts in more detail.
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,
although
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 the ratio of fossil fuels will witness a significant decrease from 64% to 44% in decades,
this
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 still lies in the highest position. Moving onto the other renewables which is second rank , the percentage is 23% in 2015 and 21% in 2040.
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, the energy from our sun will experience a remarkable rise from 2% to 18%.
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 trend,
however
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, was not accompanied by a similar trend in nuclear
power
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, whose proportion will fall slightly from 6% to 5%.
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 but not least, the ratio of wind
power
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 will increase noticeably by 7% in decades.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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