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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in the years 2002, 2006, and 2010. The data is divided into three groups:
men
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,
women
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, and
children
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.
Overall
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,
women
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 consistently had the highest proportion of daily fruit and vegetable consumption across all three years. The figures for all groups peaked in 2006 before declining slightly in 2010.
Children
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 consistently had the lowest percentages. In 2002, 25% of
women
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 consumed the recommended amount, compared to 22% of
men
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 and just 11% of
children
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. By 2006, consumption increased across all groups, with
women
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 reaching the highest percentage at 32%, followed by
men
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 at 28%, and
children
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 at 18%.
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, in 2010, the figures dropped slightly.
Women
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 still led at 27%,
while
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men
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 fell to 24%, and
children
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 decreased slightly to 14%. Despite these changes,
women
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 remained the most consistent consumers of fruits and vegetables throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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