'Innovation is often driven by the pursuit of profit and economic growth. However, some argue that innovation should be targeted towards addressing social and environmental issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.'

In modern society, increasing economic development and profit not only promotes
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but
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allows
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in
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a
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daily life.
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, some
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believe that we should pay more attention to
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with social and environmental issues. In
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essay, I will describe both perspectives, and I remain neutral on the issue.
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is no
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doubt that purchasing benefits
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a significant influence
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the world’s
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. it is a motivation to drive private companies
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in research and developing new technology.
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, the development of smartphones, electric vehicles, and artificial intelligence has generated substantial economic growth but
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transformed the way
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live and work.
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can use AI to address some
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more efficiently.
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, they can save time by using
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to communicate
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each other immediately, and they can use the rest of
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to deal with other vital things. Based on
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compelling evidence, it appears that
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of profit and economic growth is essential for
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improvement.
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, when
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aim to
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benefits,
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they dismiss the harmful of the drawbacks from it.
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, fast fashion and consumer electronics are often designed for short-term use to encourage frequent purchases, resulting in massive waste and environmental pollution. In
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,
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eco-friendly items
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as renewable energy technologies
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more important, even
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lower financial returns. These indicate that advocates believe that
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should consider social and environmental seriously.
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the pursuit of profit has been a major driver of
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, it is increasingly important to direct creative efforts toward solving social and environmental problems.
Innovation
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should aim to balance economic goals with the well-being of
people
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and the planet.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion more strongly or indicate if you lean towards one side.
Coherence and Cohesion
Some sentences are not clear and contain errors. Make sure to proofread for grammar and clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words like 'however', 'for example', and 'moreover' to connect your ideas better.
Task Achievement
You provide relevant examples, like smartphones and renewable energy, which support your points well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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