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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph demonstrates the rate of
change
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 in prices in different categories of metals, namely copper, nickel and zinc in 2014.
Overall
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, Nickel’s
price
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change
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 proportion started with the highest percentage but ended with the lowest.
In contrast
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, Zinc had the lowest figure at the beginning but experienced a significant
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 towards the end of the period , and Copper’s
price
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 fluctuated. Prices of all three metals dipped in June. Take a closer look at the
line-graph
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, first of all, The amount of
change
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 in the
price
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 of Nickel negatively dropped to -3
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percent
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per cent
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 in June.
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 the number improved significantly to one
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percent
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, which is after witnessing a period of stability in the next 4 months at -1
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percent
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, the ratio of
change
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 in Nickel
price
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 remains at its lowest compared with its counterparts. Moving on to Zinc, the figure reached a peak of 3
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percent
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per cent
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 in February and continuously fell slightly to -1
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percent
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per cent
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 in October.
This
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 movement went up to 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in the
last
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 month of 2014.
Last
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 but not least, the average monthly fluctuation in the
price
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 of Copper went down from 2
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percent
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per cent
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 to nearly zero
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percent
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 in the first half of the given time, but later increased noticeably at about 1.5
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percent
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 in December, causing Copper to stand at second position compared to
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the others
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others
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 two.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, price, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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