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Firstly

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, I can see there are a new building like the cafes & shops behind Lifeboat , and the second showers & toilets next to

first

Correct article usage

the first

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park car from the south.

Also

Linking Words

, some buildings

replace

Wrong verb form

have replaced

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the way of using it.

For

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example

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example,

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in the first

plane

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plane,

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we can consider that there

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are

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Fishing boats and

marina

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a marina

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( private yachts ) they

are

Verb problem

have

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replaced

Wrong verb form

replacing

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each other now.

Secondly

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, they built a new Dock to have more ships in Porth Harbour and a nice Hotel with a private beach, we can consider that the beach was public in the past, but right now is not.

Also

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, we can see that in the past there

are

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were

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only 2 ways to enter

into

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apply

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Porth Harbour, and nowadays we have 3 ways one of them is the same as

the

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in the

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past but with

new

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a new

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road to the hotel, and 2 of them are from car parks

anoud.abukhTue May 27 2025

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coherence

The introduction should clearly state what the main changes are. Try to summarize the main points at the beginning.

cohesion

Make sure to connect ideas smoothly. Use linking words to help the reader follow your thoughts better.

task achievement

Add more specific examples to explain your points more clearly. For example, mention what was there before and how it has changed.

task achievement

Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.

task achievement

You provided some specific details about the changes in Porth Harbour.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

150 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Solar energy is becoming popular in many countries of the world because of its availability without any limit. Do the advantages of solar energy outweigh its disadvantages?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think this will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?