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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You stayed at your friends’ house when you participated in a business seminar in New Zealand. You left a file with important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend, describing the file and ask him/her to return it to you by post.

Dear Karan, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about a crucial file which
contain
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 important documents.
Firstly
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, I am thankful to you for hosting me in your respected house during my office
semina
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seminar
, I just felt like my own house.
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, I want to request you to check my room for an important file that I
forget
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while
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 rushing to the airport.
Moreover
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, the file is
of
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blue
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in color
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color
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colour
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 and it is about the size of the laptop. It
also
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have
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 my name and address written on the front side. The file contains my personal documents which are very important for me. I hope you will find my file soon. Yours lovingly, Harpreet

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Make sure to check spelling mistakes, like 'seminar' and 'forgot'. This can improve your score.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one idea to make it easier to read.
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Adding a more specific request for how to send the file back would be helpful.
coherence and cohesion
You have a warm greeting and closing, which gives a friendly tone to your letter.
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You clearly describe the file, which helps your friend know what to look for.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • hospitality
  • gratitude
  • essential paperwork
  • confidential
  • postal service
  • reimburse
  • insurance
  • tracking number
  • expedited shipping
  • courier
  • dispatch
  • airmail
  • return address
  • registered post
  • parcel
  • fragile
  • acknowledgment
  • safekeeping
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