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In today’s very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, Which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualification? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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 your
life
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life,
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 you should have more than one
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skills
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skill
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 to handle easily
with
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the problems that you might face. Its not
nessery
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necessary
 for
worker
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a worker
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 to have
qualification
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qualifications
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 more than social
skills
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,
however
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 if you just have qualificaton
istead
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instead
 of having social
skills
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 you might
struggel
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struggle
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alot
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a lot
 issues
especially
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 in your work and you might lose
the
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attention if you
faced
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 a problem
for
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 the first time.Social
skills
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is
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 more important than things that you should have to gain a job or to be
successful
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a successful
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 person.
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addition
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 it can make you strong to face each problem smoothly and easily. People usually focus
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 how to get prestigious
qualification
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qualifications
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instead
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 of improving
thier
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their
 social
skills
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.
Namely
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Namely,
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 Bill Gates couldn't complete his
university's
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university
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 degree
however
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 he has a lot of social
skills
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 he
had
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became a successful person
in
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the
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worldwide and he evetully became a role model for more
tham
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than
million
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a million
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 people.
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huilt
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built
 his own company and
currently
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currently,
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 he is considered
as
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one of the
most
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richest people entire the world. Having no qualification doesn't mean your fault you can wake up
in
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at
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 any time and
countinue
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continue
 your journey just
beliefe
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believe
belief
 in yourself.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas are well-organized. Start with a clear introduction, develop your ideas in the body, and end with a conclusion.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points. Bill Gates is a good start, but more examples would strengthen your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Fix spelling mistakes like 'nessery', 'struggel', 'thier', and 'beliefe' to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You have some strong ideas about the importance of social skills.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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