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The first chart below, shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kind of tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring, and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below, shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kind of tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring, and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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men
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women
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 in a country take Partin four types of
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housework
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and
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women
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 are more
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involved
cooking
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in cooking
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 and cleaning,
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men
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 are more likely to do house repairs.
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about
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women
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 cook compared to around 40% of
men
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. Nomen
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 spend nearly 90 minutes cooking,
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men
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 only spend GO.
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, over 20k of
men
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 do house
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report
reports
repairs
, but less than 10% of Nomen do.
Men
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also
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 spend more time on repairs than
women
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. Pet care seems to be
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started
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take
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the eighth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the ninth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the ninth paragraph.
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