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Full time university students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?’

The issue of
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 universities has sparked considerable debate.
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 some people believe that
students
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 should give their all to study. I firmly disagree with that statement.
This
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Firstly
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, I strongly believe that
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 balance is an important thing.
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 is because
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cruial
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crucial
 it is for the individual mental health and well-being, study pressure can lead to stress and burnout. Participating in sports,
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and hobbies
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 can be a great way to relax, reduce stress, and maintain a healthy mind.
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, studies
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 shown that 70% of
students
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 who have activities outside the university have better grades
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 of the year.
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, it can be a practical experience which can be directly applicable
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 their future careers. These experiences can sometimes be more impactful than theoretical knowledge.
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, joining clubs, internships, or volunteer work provides hands-on experience.
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, Involvement in various activities allows
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 to meet peers from different backgrounds, which can be beneficial for future career opportunities and personal relationships. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that
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delicate
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 all their time for studying.
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 the importance
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of mental
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 health and social life.

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language
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content
Try to develop more examples to support your points, such as more details on how sports help mental health.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that connects well to your argument.
positive
The essay has a clear opinion and structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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Some good points about mental health and practical experience were raised.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • extracurricular activities
  • soft skills
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • stress and burnout
  • networking opportunities
  • career opportunities
  • time management
  • prioritize
  • juggle multiple responsibilities
  • practical experience
  • theoretical knowledge
  • community engagement
  • social awareness
  • volunteer work
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