Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, sucha as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

Some

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are of the opinion that people should agree with their bad

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situation

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willing

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to change it.

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others believe that they should

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try to get themselves out of

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situation

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and improve.

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essay will discuss both

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perspectives and agree with the latter as everyone is capable

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out of

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shortcomings if they put

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effort. On the one hand, People should accept their

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Make sure to fully develop your ideas and include more examples to support your points.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the flow of your essay by using linking words to connect your ideas better.

coherence and cohesion

Work on grammar and spelling to avoid small mistakes, such as 'situtation' which should be 'situation'.

task achievement

You present both views clearly, which is a good start for the essay.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction sets the context of the debate well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

73 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

contentment
reduce stress
foster peace of mind
constant pursuit
unattainable
disappointment
mental distress
personal growth
self-improvement
resilience
pursuit of happiness
settle for less
quality of life
strategic decision
assess options
right moment
courage
effort
significant life changes
capabilities
desires
individual beliefs
values
circumstances
personal goals
risk tolerance
potential for success

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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ome people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In many countries, the amount of household waste like food packaging is increasing. What are the causes of this problem? What measures could be taken to reduce it?

Many students find it harder to study when they are at the university or college than when they were at school. Why is this? What can be done to solve the problem?